Mania draft
This is the first draft of our film opening. After showing our peers this draft we used their feedback to make changes before creating the final draft. Having everyone's feedback was extremely helpful as we knew what we had done well and what we could improve on.
Peer Feedback
Below is the feedback we received after our peers watched our film opening. It was extremely helpful to look at other peoples thoughts on our film as before we handed in our final draft we could see what people liked about our film and what improvements we could make.
Mania website
www.lolliewiffen.wix.com/maniafilm
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Teacher Feedback
The teacher feedback for what went well:
- The bedroom sequence
- Props have been used well
- Camera has a gentle pan
- Good acting
- Nice pan
- Steady camerawork
- Charlotte has done a good job with her acting
The criticism that we got included:
- Where is she? Is she a prisoner?
- Sounds is off when off screen talking comes in
- Shot of Charlotte is really long
- Mise en scene repetition
- Where does Lollie appear from? Check side of shot
- Voice over sound/ sound dissolves
Script for Mania
Family member - 'The hearing was today'
'Its going to be okay, we will get you out of here'
'Ruth, Ruth?'
'Ive tried and tried with you'
'I don't know how much more of this i can take'
'Why are you shutting me out'
'RUTH'
Ruth - 'Ive told you to leave me alone'
'GET OUT'
We felt this script left many enigma codes as the audience do not know why the patient is in hospital or why the family member wants to get her out. The audience also do not know why the patient wants to be left alone.
'Its going to be okay, we will get you out of here'
'Ruth, Ruth?'
'Ive tried and tried with you'
'I don't know how much more of this i can take'
'Why are you shutting me out'
'RUTH'
Ruth - 'Ive told you to leave me alone'
'GET OUT'
We felt this script left many enigma codes as the audience do not know why the patient is in hospital or why the family member wants to get her out. The audience also do not know why the patient wants to be left alone.
Target Audience
The target audience for our film 'Mania' is 16-25 year olds. We have chosen this as our target audience as this is the age range which most films aim towards. This is because the age range are most likely to be interested in going to the cinema to watch new films. Our target audience is both male and female as we believe our film will appeal to both genders.
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